thesis: reveal that people are not able to see through their desires but once they let go of those desires they are not bound to acting according to what they want but instead they can decide how to act
the phrase "dynamic characterization" suggests that the method of characterization changes. Pick a new technique or take them out of thesis and analyze the techniques as you prove your point with quotes. I like you thesis. I think you will need to be sure exactly what you mean by "hindered" "desires" and "lifestyle" so that you keep your paper extremely focused. I would like to see "lifestyle" defined a bit more in the thesis or introduction.
Good, the direction is really starting to take shape. The "think outside of what they want" part is still confusing and I'm unclear of its connection to the first part. Good work revising.
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ReplyDeletethe phrase "dynamic characterization" suggests that the method of characterization changes. Pick a new technique or take them out of thesis and analyze the techniques as you prove your point with quotes. I like you thesis. I think you will need to be sure exactly what you mean by "hindered" "desires" and "lifestyle" so that you keep your paper extremely focused. I would like to see "lifestyle" defined a bit more in the thesis or introduction.
ReplyDeleteGood, the direction is really starting to take shape. The "think outside of what they want" part is still confusing and I'm unclear of its connection to the first part. Good work revising.
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